Reviews For "A Critical Moment for the Science Ninja Team" A rewrite.
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Reviewer: gatchamarie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/11/2011 11:50 AM Title: Chapter 1: The night before.

You've done such a great job again in describing the human and family aspect of the characters, Dragonsbain, especially where Nambu is concerned!  It's so nice to see the Doctor not that clinical as he's often described!  You also managed to make me giggle with Joe and Ken! Thanks again for a lovely read!

Author's Response: Dear Gatchamarie, The basic idea that I'm attempting to get across is that childern will not do something this all encompassing if there is no one that they can at least trust. Let's face it, if the team thought that they were being used, manipulated or threatened by anyone, that person or group would cease to exist. Thus, the team must trust,respect and love Nambu. It wasn't Tatsunoko's job to explore the depts of relationships between characters. The best explained relationship was between Kenaterio, Nambu and Ken. That barely scratched the surface. I guess that is why I jumped on this challenge. It is making me very happy that I'm able to get the human and family aspects,or, at least, my version, of them across to everyone. I'm also glad that people are enjoying the read. I'm DEFINATELY going to do a story about the itsy,bitsy spider excerise. That little blurb has definately been running around my mind growing into something much bigger. A showcase of how Ken and Joe's devious little minds worked back then.Please continue to enjoy and all the feedback has helped a lot.

Reviewer: jublke Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/03/2011 12:45 PM Title: Chapter 1: The night before.

You really got me with Katse singing Oh, What a Beautiful Morning!  I will never hear that song in quite the same way again.  :)  But poor Joe.  No matter how many times I read about the puppy episode, I always wonder why.  Why a puppy?  Why a centerfuge?  Oh, and welcome to Gatchfanfic, Dragonsbain!  :) 

Author's Response: Dear jublke, Katse and Broadway. It's a match made in Heaven. I had to do it. Hopefully, by the end of the rewrite, I'll give my expiation of why Joe had to get that dog. Thanks for the Welcome.

Reviewer: gatchamarie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06/02/2011 10:45 AM Title: Chapter 1: The night before.

You're doing a great job in describing, and explaining what might have happened before the mission!  I also like the way you're portraying the "family" relationship between the Team and Dr. Nambu!  Maybe you've described Ken just a bit more miserly than he really must have been!  But then, I might be biased since he's my favourite character!:)

Speaking for myself, I don't mind the random Romaji words at all!  I like to find this hint of originality in a Gatchaman related story!  I've also found a way to search for meanings in case I'd encounter any unfamiliar words!  Please keep this going as I'm looking forward to know more!



Author's Response: Gatchamarie thank-you. The whole scene in the restaurant was just my idea for a good laugh before I had to start getting dark. Ken and his forever tab with Jun was just way to easy of a target. Trust me Ken has always had my respect. He is trying to be Captain Picard at the tender age of 18. He pulls it off, for the most part.

Reviewer: lborgia88 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/01/2011 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 1: The night before.

I like the way you're filling in some of the gaps in episode 20, like giving a reason why Joe was late at the beginning.  I look forward to seeing what you do with the rest of this episode, particularly with its gaps in logic!

Author's Response: Thanks Iborgia88. Everybody, do I need to translate anything? I stuck with the Romaji for ease of reading. Or, if it is to annoying, I will stick to English.

Reviewer: TransmuteJun Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06/01/2011 11:38 AM Title: Chapter 1: The night before.

An interesting start to the mission. I wonder why Joe was sleeping so deeply when the others weren't? I love the look at Katse celebrating. It's early enough in the series for him to think that this could be the 'one fell swoop' that hands Galactor victory, and you can see it in his attitude. 

Author's Response: Dear TJ, Joe always has a lot of activities going on. So, if he needed some downtime, he would have to schedule it. Thus, he gave himself permission to totally relax. Also, being a teenager, he can achieve that really deep sleep that only an earthquake or a very determined parent can wake them from.

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