Date: 07/01/2012 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed this, but found it a little confusing trying to track who was saying and doing what. I'd love to see more around the water talking to Jason, like seeing how long that's been going on and what else has been talking to him.
I was definitely left wondering if Jason still planned to shove Mark off the cliff! But that's a loose end that works. :)
Author's Response: Thanks a lot. :) I'd tried reformatting it to clarify who said what with formatting differences, but evidently that was less than successful. I'll be fixing that.