Date: 09/12/2011 9:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
Grammar stickler time: should be 'poring' instead of 'pouring.' And I think it's borscht.
Ken the Magpie instead of Ken the Eagle. All goons would carry shiny things to throw at him. Bombastic lines ruined by suddenly breaking off to say, "Oooh, shiny!"
Author's Response: Ah, this just shows that even former English teachers make the occasional mistake! Thanks for pointing them out; I'll tend to them promptly. I'm glad you enjoyed the story, warts and all.